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    dots Submission Name: Answer, My Lifedots
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    Author: Kael Fenshir
    ASL Info:    26 / M / That weird place
    Elite Ratio:    2.18 - 17/57/52
    Words: 111
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsAnswer, My Lifedots
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    I opened my hands
    With love I covered my eyes
    The darkness made sense to my sight
    Now I knew who I was

    Missing pages
    To the book that is my life
    I reminded you always
    Of my care and my plight

    I begged for forgiveness
    I asked you to be my wife
    I then found another
    Nothing left now but strife

    I know you know
    That I love you
    I miss you every single day
    Fate in a theater of play

    So come hold my hand
    The one that's covered in blood
    I've worked this flesh
    You're the only thing left to love






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