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    dots Submission Name: I hate youdots

    Author: DaniEllis
    Elite Ratio:    2 - 6/7/8
    Words: 95
    Class/Type: Poetry/Passion
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    dotsI hate youdots

    I'm lost in the depth
    of your eyes.
    Though confused by the voice
    of your lies.

    I'm lost in the comfort
    of your touch.
    As much as I love you,
    you can't love me that much.

    As I clench my fists
    in your hair,
    You're slowly revealing
    what is bare.

    When you look in my eyes,
    what do you see?
    Is it convenience,
    or do you see me?

    You tell me you love me,
    your words are so thin.
    Then you kiss your way up
    from my chest to my chin.

    Submitted on 2013-08-16 16:42:51     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      this is rhyming that I like , and that says a lot about you as a writer because in general I hate rhyming !
    | Posted on 2013-08-23 00:00:00 | by layDsayD | [ Reply to This ]

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