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    dots Submission Name: just godots

    Author: DaniEllis
    Elite Ratio:    2 - 6/7/8
    Words: 114
    Class/Type: Poetry/Passion
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       Horny guy talking to an inexperienced girl. Trying to convince her, sweet at first then getting frustrated and pushy.
    I don't capitalize when being the lesser or bad person in the scenario. Just something that I've always done.

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    dotsjust godots

    just go down
    it'll be alright
    just go down
    and i'll love you tonight

    do this for us
    it's no big deal
    go down on me now
    and do it for real

    i know you're scared
    but that doesnt matter
    listen out there to that
    clitter and clatter...

    we can't be caught
    they're all outside
    hop on my dick
    i'll give you a ride.

    we have a chance
    thats all i need
    to get in your pants
    and then i will leave.

    if you don't want to
    i guess i should go;
    i really wish
    you'd go down on me though!

    Submitted on 2013-08-18 21:11:59     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    | Posted on 2013-08-23 00:00:00 | by StephE | [ Reply to This ]
      Funny, seems like you are trying too hard to make everything rhyme. It does have a good flow though. There was a rhythm to it when I read it. Possibly use better descriptive words. (I don't know, trying to give some advise):) But it was alright. I enjoyed the read, just glad that no little eyes were reading it.
    | Posted on 2013-08-23 00:00:00 | by StephE | [ Reply to This ]

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