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    dots Submission Name: Whoredots
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    Author: DaniEllis
    Elite Ratio:    2 - 6/7/8
    Words: 60
    Class/Type: Poetry/Betrayal
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    dotsWhoredots
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    Passionate anger that terrifies,
    A familiar voice made it hurt so much more...
    Murderous eyes still etched in my mind
    And what's left of me; called a whore.

    My horror used to be my comfort
    When I was curled up crying on the floor
    Something to distract me from his rage
    But I don't want to be afraid anymore.




    Submitted on 2013-08-18 21:18:51     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      :) Yes, it was from a horrible experience, but it doesn't hurt anymore, except the excruciating pain on the anniversary every year, for some reason it hurts then. idky, but it doesn't hurt anymore. It only made me stronger.

    And thanks for the formatting tip ;)
    | Posted on 2013-09-03 00:00:00 | by DaniEllis | [ Reply to This ]
      this I liked . the format could be different there is so much rawness in this if you broke it up it would make it more powerful example:

    Passionate anger
    terrifies,
    A familiar voice
    makes it hurt
    so much more...
    Murderous eyes
    etched in my mind
    what's left of me
    whore.

    that being said I am not sure if you wrote this from some horrible personal experience. I hope not but if so keep writing it removes the hurt from inside you and puts it on paper it can't hurt you there ..no one can hurt you there!
    | Posted on 2013-08-23 00:00:00 | by layDsayD | [ Reply to This ]


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