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    dots Submission Name: That Timedots
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    Author: DaniEllis
    Elite Ratio:    2 - 6/7/8
    Words: 91
    Class/Type: Poetry/Trapped
    Total Views: 663
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 502



    Description:
       Interrupted by an unexpected guest.
    (so many chances- to have sex... but didn't, then put on the spot and made to do it right then)


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    dotsThat Timedots
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    Violent glances
    Murderous thoughts
    So many chances
    But put on the spot.

    You wouldn't let me go,
    Then you pulled out the knife,
    You made sure it was slow
    As I cried for my life...

    My strength had left me
    I wanted to run
    But you held me down,
    Until you were done.

    I don't know what
    To think anymore.
    I survived you that time
    By a knock on the door.




    Submitted on 2013-08-18 21:38:41     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      hmmm the flow was good but the rhyming comes across bad... and the actual content feels to visible like I wanted it to be hard metal instead of just saying knife. good write keep it up!
    | Posted on 2013-08-23 00:00:00 | by layDsayD | [ Reply to This ]
      Not Violet?
    | Posted on 2013-08-21 00:00:00 | by poetotoe | [ Reply to This ]


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