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    dots Submission Name: Recoverydots

    Author: lolaxelmo
    ASL Info:    23/F/IA
    Elite Ratio:    2.96 - 34/37/38
    Words: 39
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
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    i feel the sudden rifts, subtle shifts—
    changes in temperature
    boiling point of mood
    cool to balance calm.

    love in outreaches of
    conversation, snippets received and
    transmitted back, a reflection
    formed with discrepancy—
    can it be recovered?

    Submitted on 2013-08-19 13:17:08     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      WOW I really like this the whole thing was so
    complete and so short I confess I struggle to shorten my work you have a talent to convey emotion in only a few lines you have talent and I really liked this!
    | Posted on 2013-08-23 00:00:00 | by layDsayD | [ Reply to This ]
    | Posted on 2013-08-21 00:00:00 | by lolaxelmo | [ Reply to This ]
      In the Continuum.
    | Posted on 2013-08-21 00:00:00 | by poetotoe | [ Reply to This ]

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