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    dots Submission Name: The Phonedots
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    Author: DaniEllis
    Elite Ratio:    2 - 6/7/8
    Words: 137
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    dotsThe Phonedots
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    when i'm on the phone,
    you flirt with my fingers.
    when i'm on the phone,
    you blow on my stomach.
    when i'm on the phone,
    you massage my back.
    when i'm on the phone,
    you breath in my ear.
    when i'm on the phone,
    you put your arms around me.
    when i'm on the phone,
    you play with my lips.
    when i'm on the phone,
    you nibble at my neck,
    when i'm on the phone,
    you bite at my hips.
    when i'm on the phone,
    your hands always find mine,
    when i'm on the phone,
    your head lies in my lap.
    when i'm on the phone,
    you spread apart my knees.
    when i'm on the phone,
    you beg babe please~
    when i'm on the phone,
    your face just beams.
    when i'm on you,
    the damn phone rings!




    Submitted on 2013-08-19 22:18:05     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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       this was so good it was long and normally I get distracted or bored but I didn't it almost feels like a song!
    | Posted on 2013-08-23 00:00:00 | by layDsayD | [ Reply to This ]


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