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Loving You is Killing Me

Author: TheSnoitart
ASL Info:    19/ M/ USA
Elite Ratio:    3.63 - 53 /64 /52
Words: 236
Class/Type: Poetry /Angry
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Loving You is Killing Me

Morality demands we keep a platonic distance
But you damn morality even as you preach it
And I am weak.

How much have you told him, I wonder?
Does he know that we lay in your bed
Until 2:30 AM
Talking while I hold you?
Does he know that sometimes
You cry in your sleep?

And why
If he's so good
Did you need me in the first place?
And why
Can't I say no?
This only ends in pain, for me.

I see you, and I melt
I leave you, and steel myself
(A misguided effort at saving my own skin)
Only to melt again with one of your goddamn

The best part is
When the shit hits the fan
And oh boy, will it.
All this,
All you've done, to all of us
Somehow, that's my fault too.

If you wanted to help me
Stop hating myself
Making me question my own morals
Probably wasnt the best way to go about it.
Now I'm damned in everyone's eyes
And none more than my own.

Even now, knowing that
Still I lay and talk and hold you
Let you cry into my shoulder
And stare at the ceiling, pretending
That this is forever
That it's not going to hurt
That it's not slowly eating me alive.

Damn you for making me love you.

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  Beautifully written and worded
| Posted on 2013-10-12 00:00:00 | by Teofila | [ Reply to This ]
  First of all, I absolutely adore the style of this piece. It reads easily in my head. And, later, when I am not in a room with sleeping people, I am certain I need to read it aloud.

It definitely has strong emotion. And what is poetry if not written emotion?

I enjoy that I can feel and relate to the struggle.I read it...and thought..."but wait... what happens next?" Wanting more. That's just...great.

I really, really, really am glad I clicked this link.

"And I am weak."- Probably my favorite line. It screams of humanity. Of self-depreciation. Of The motto for every great mistake and often for great adventures.
| Posted on 2013-08-24 00:00:00 | by SweetAndOhSoME | [ Reply to This ]

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