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    dots Submission Name: Loving You is Killing Medots
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    Author: TheSnoitart
    ASL Info:    19/ M/ USA
    Elite Ratio:    3.63 - 53/64/52
    Words: 236
    Class/Type: Poetry/Angry
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    dotsLoving You is Killing Medots
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    Morality demands we keep a platonic distance
    But you damn morality even as you preach it
    And I am weak.

    How much have you told him, I wonder?
    Does he know that we lay in your bed
    Until 2:30 AM
    Talking while I hold you?
    Does he know that sometimes
    You cry in your sleep?

    And why
    If he's so good
    Did you need me in the first place?
    And why
    Can't I say no?
    This only ends in pain, for me.

    I see you, and I melt
    I leave you, and steel myself
    (A misguided effort at saving my own skin)
    Only to melt again with one of your goddamn
    Beautiful
    Smiles.

    The best part is
    When the shit hits the fan
    And oh boy, will it.
    All this,
    All you've done, to all of us
    Somehow, that's my fault too.

    If you wanted to help me
    Stop hating myself
    Making me question my own morals
    Probably wasnt the best way to go about it.
    Now I'm damned in everyone's eyes
    And none more than my own.

    Even now, knowing that
    Still I lay and talk and hold you
    Let you cry into my shoulder
    And stare at the ceiling, pretending
    That this is forever
    That it's not going to hurt
    That it's not slowly eating me alive.

    Damn you for making me love you.




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      Beautifully written and worded
    | Posted on 2013-10-12 00:00:00 | by Teofila | [ Reply to This ]
      First of all, I absolutely adore the style of this piece. It reads easily in my head. And, later, when I am not in a room with sleeping people, I am certain I need to read it aloud.

    It definitely has strong emotion. And what is poetry if not written emotion?

    I enjoy that I can feel and relate to the struggle.I read it...and thought..."but wait... what happens next?" Wanting more. That's just...great.

    I really, really, really am glad I clicked this link.

    "And I am weak."- Probably my favorite line. It screams of humanity. Of self-depreciation. Of ...life. The motto for every great mistake and often for great adventures.
    | Posted on 2013-08-24 00:00:00 | by SweetAndOhSoME | [ Reply to This ]


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