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    dots Submission Name: Parked Northdots

    Author: lolaxelmo
    ASL Info:    23/F/IA
    Elite Ratio:    2.96 - 34/37/38
    Words: 110
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    dotsParked Northdots

    rumors fell upon eager ears—
    visible Northern Lights in the heartland
    a midnight excursion between lovers shared
    outrunning the pollution of city people
    and streetlamps illuminating the dark sky
    in clouds of worn yellow light kept

    unpacked car riding north
    to catch flashes in the
    peaking cycle, eleven years waiting —
    anticipating magnetic holes aligning
    the atmosphere of earth and sun—
    a spiritual experience
    once sought by Native Americans
    believing the Great Lights were sky giants—
    reincarnations of great hunters
    experienced spirits.

    they miss the window
    midnight local time best seen
    a night spent chasing spirituality
    ends in an idle car parked North.

    Submitted on 2013-08-21 16:00:25     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I really like this I have never written about nature I just never could but I took a writing class in college last semester and was forced to. it gave me a new perspective . I got a feeling I was seeing what you where that is a talent to be able to convey that in another person ..good write
    | Posted on 2013-08-23 00:00:00 | by layDsayD | [ Reply to This ]

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