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    dots Submission Name: I Can No Longer Stopdots
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    Author: KeeperOfLight
    ASL Info:    23, Vancouver BC
    Elite Ratio:    2.55 - 41/64/76
    Words: 200
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsI Can No Longer Stopdots
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    It’s sad
    your eyes are open,
    but only enough to let the light in

    I couldn’t cut you a smaller piece of cake

    You’re missing the big picture
    take a repose and remove your hat
    so that you may see all the sky

    the clouds are vast today
    in color and shape
    the world flaunts its many textures

    seize the time to expand your thoughts
    cherish the augmentation of your being
    remembering this euphoria will not last

    with your eyes open
    there is also pain and suffering

    It’s not directly caused by you
    but you feel like you’re apart of the problem

    at this point tender hearts either break or harden
    there are moments when they stay soft
    and reach out to reschedule another’s pain
    for the next time they feel no cheer

    The vast sky is now dampened with rain
    It falls on your lashes defusing the light

    there’s some beauty to its lie
    but a lie it still feels like

    I can’t put your eyes away

    I’m here to see your payment
    you don’t really want me to look away
    as a tender heart betrays your day




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      I liked this it flows good and I like the format you chose I am a little confused on this line:

    but a lie it still feels like

    I don't know why it sticks out to me and I cant suggest anything but just wanted to you look at it
    thankyou for submitting I look forward to reading more of your work
    | Posted on 2013-08-23 00:00:00 | by layDsayD | [ Reply to This ]


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