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    dots Submission Name: Tell her "I love You"dots
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    Author: gwenn sundala
    Elite Ratio:    3.71 - 76/70/51
    Words: 126
    Class/Type: Story/Longing
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    Description:
       I wrote this poem a long time ago, when my grandma died. I wrote using the Elibeth Gensch moniker, and was going to post it on the site, but then I lost my account info for my original account. While cleaning in my house the other day, I found a paper from poetry.com scam, and I realized that this was the poem I almost gave in to the scam with. Going back to poetry,com, I found the poem, so here it is.


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    dotsTell her "I love You"dots
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    She lay in bed, unable to sleep
    Where had the time gone?
    Just yesterday, she was a carefree girl
    Now she was in High School
    She wishes she could stay young
    And yet she wants to grow up
    She wishes she could see the one
    She loved with all her heart
    Three hours away, her grandma fell ill
    they said she wouldn`t last long
    She smiled at her husband and whispered these words;
    "Tell Eli that I love her"
    When Eli was told, "Your Grandma is gone"
    She mourned for the one she loved
    She felt so guilty for not saying goodbye
    She`d have to leave it in God`s hands, now




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      Very sad. Im glad you had the courage to put so much emotion into it though. I think the more emotion you put into your poems the better. it really helps the people reading it understand what your feeling about whatever situation is going on, in this case someones death im guessing who was very close to you. always a sad time...
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    Teofila<3
    | Posted on 2013-09-14 00:00:00 | by Teofila | [ Reply to This ]
      Sad but beautiful. It's great that you had a close relationship with her.

    I really like the "it is in God's hands now" part. Too many people get caught up in trying to change things.


    It's a wonderful expression of a very acute grief.
    | Posted on 2013-08-24 00:00:00 | by SweetAndOhSoME | [ Reply to This ]


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