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    Author: layDsayD
    ASL Info:    29/f/florida
    Elite Ratio:    3.16 - 264/243/147
    Words: 92
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
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    Description:
       in my mothers childhood bedroom


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    dotsWhere it began dots
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    The ghetto crept in
    Swallowed a city
    Cruel, hard
    I want to smell her here
    Want some remnant to remain
    Sepia photograph
    It should speak to me
    Because it’s her
    Right here
    Tarnished
    Curling corners
    Pressed up against dirty glass
    She is not here
    I conjure her image
    But I can do that in my bedroom

    H.Price




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