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    dots Submission Name: Uglierdots
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    Author: layDsayD
    ASL Info:    29/f/florida
    Elite Ratio:    3.16 - 264/243/147
    Words: 76
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
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    Description:
       I have a vague feeling the ending is not right ??? any suggestions


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    dotsUglierdots
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    It strangles me
    I no longer fight
    Not glamorous
    Not like a movie
    Uglier
    Painful, real
    I can feel me dying
    And not the pretty way
    No gently closing eyelids
    Uglier
    I can smell the rotting
    Not a hospital room flowers and antiseptic
    No steady beeping that slowly fades
    Uglier
    Like the hurt is welcome
    It keeps you seeing
    Images conjured, drift in
    It’s never birthdays or oceans
    Uglier




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