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    dots Submission Name: Work in Progressdots
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    Author: StephE
    ASL Info:    34/Female/Sacramento, CA
    Elite Ratio:    2.88 - 10/10/16
    Words: 166
    Class/Type: Poetry/Passion
    Total Views: 497
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    Description:
       Hope this is punctuated correct. Erotic. I am still working on the ending... So this is my "Work in Progress" lol Any advice on the ending would be great, and any other comments are welcome. Thanks for your view :)


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    dotsWork in Progressdots
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    Please seduce me,
    touch my skin,
    Let me feel that sensation again.

    To have you close,
    to feel your heart,
    The tingling begins to start.

    Warming my body,
    as it passes through,

    Each passing second,
    The more I want you.

    Engaged in a passionate kiss,
    a dancing of tongues upon our two lips.

    Caressing touches over the crest of my tits,
    My nipples teased with your nibbles, sucks and licks,

    Grinding your groin in sync with mine,
    Two naked bodies have come entwined,

    The spark between us,
    now a steady burn.

    E'ery inch of our bodies,
    we both have learned.

    And then


    Inside,


    I feel you dip.

    Curling my toes,
    the sheets I grip.

    An orgasmic climax,
    as two souls unite.

    Quivering with excitement,
    we relish the time.

    There we lay,
    still embraced.

    With looks of satisfaction,
    each upon our face.






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