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    Author: Wolfwatching
    ASL Info:    28/Male/Ireland
    Elite Ratio:    7.81 - 94/130/109
    Words: 101
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    The boats are coming in, thick
    through this sea-saw of night;
    Their anchors almost made of money
    raise dust

    as they scrape the ocean floor.
    There's such a finish on the scene
    and the details we're glossing over

    white wax on the window sill
    the slow, slippage of confusion simply
    waiting to perceive these lightened waves
    powerful green lamps
    swinging underwater

    leaving no place for a lover to hide out there.

    And her roar is exhausting
    raining life itself on the wet battlements
    of so many
    well-laid stones going round and round.

    Submitted on 2013-08-24 21:59:20     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This is not just a bookmark but a treasure I shall keep with the others. Tucked away, for those day longing remembrances.


    | Posted on 2014-05-16 00:00:00 | by clay | [ Reply to This ]
      Basically I love how this never settles because it is full of hinges.
    | Posted on 2013-08-24 00:00:00 | by thesunbird | [ Reply to This ]

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