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    Author: thesunbird
    Elite Ratio:    8 - 198/19/19
    Words: 175
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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                                                                      i.
    as if where
    was an instrument




                             and I picked it up
                        and played its dumbness








    ii.






    Staring at the face of God
    & the microcosm.







    sometimes when i'm driving
    a single thought of you will give me goosebumps

                                                                                                                   iii.


                                                                                                             So.


    one time when you are driving, will you think of me
                                                                                    too?



    iv.


    like the opening of the ear has a way
    for giving the heart
    some space.




    v.


    like the
    finger preparing food
    for the mouth - we can captivate
    an autonomy.



                   vi.

    you are simple lying supine.
    by the shovelfuls
    i am wet black sand, filling the earth,

    we love





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