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    dots Submission Name: Mr Perfectdots
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    Author: AutumnLeaves
    ASL Info:    26/f/ Cyprus
    Elite Ratio:    4.62 - 95/103/44
    Words: 95
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsMr Perfectdots
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    A dynasty of faces surround his every day.
    Words travel around him faster than the speed of light,
    Bright indeed, yet insignificant.
    Beauty is his alternative medicine, in the absence of truth and fire.
    In the absence of star-watching and underwater kissing,
    A plastic smile is all he needs.
    Nocturnal windows however, nest his longing
    His untold tears,
    Of the pain he never felt, the life he never left.
    The woman he gave up waiting, because the sky was not enough.
    Mr Perfect, has it all
    because the sky was not enough.




    Submitted on 2013-08-25 15:56:05     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I don't know what served as your muse for this poem, but somehow I saw something familiar in your words. Not an exact reflection - a shadow...an outline.

    Each line of this piece prompted me to read more. I wasn't lost after the first line...and wanted to read more...and so on for each of the following lines.

    I was left with asking a simple question: are you talking about me? Obviously that would be absurd, but the feeling you left me with is hard to deny.

    Sorry if this wasn't a critical assessment of your work...but I just thought I'd tell you how it all made me "feel". Silly, I know...

    Nicely done...

    Kelly
    | Posted on 2015-05-17 00:00:00 | by krs3332003 | [ Reply to This ]


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