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    dots Submission Name: The Boxdots

    Author: CynicalxDreamer
    ASL Info:    31/m/7th Level of Hell
    Elite Ratio:    2.46 - 40/100/64
    Words: 131
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 984
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
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       For a long time, I was unable to express myself. I found I had hit a dry spell in wanting to write. Worse, I came to realize that though I feel the words in my poetry...I cannot express them orally. My voice carries no tones or emotion to convey what I am saying. That...is my box, amongst other things within it.

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    dotsThe Boxdots

    This box is all I know
    There's a corner I go to
    Soothing solitude awaits
    That I cannot bear

    There is a box
    The tiny space of it
    Suffocating in its emptiness
    Muffled screams of silence

    I live in a box
    Stuck inside its madness
    Trying to get out
    Feeling locked in

    The walls holding me inside
    Hiding all my thoughts
    Showing only my failures
    Reflecting back to me isolation

    This is the box
    That contains broken dreams
    That restrains my words
    Choking time into days

    This box holds nothing precious
    Only serves as a prison
    To my soul
    For crimes I do not know

    Time has not eroded this cage
    Wrapped tight and dark
    With the package label
    Reading FRAGILE - MY LIFE

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      I know what u mean, i can relate to it like u did. Keep it up!

    | Posted on 2014-12-12 00:00:00 | by D-Ink | [ Reply to This ]
      It should be a little more honest because it is fanatic confessions of crimes committed. poe
    | Posted on 2013-08-27 00:00:00 | by poetotoe | [ Reply to This ]
      This was a really good piece. Technically it was fine, albeit not specially so, but the technical aspect doesn`t matter because what makes this piece awesome is the raw honesty and vulnerability in it! I am one of those who will always value honesty and emotion more than technical Precision. A poem without emotion is meaningless to me. You should feel a poem as much as you read it, and I truly felt this one. You`ve used the words well to captivate a negative state of mind, and the deep sometimes angsty emotions that come I think most of us have been there, but some of us feel it more than others. I Guess to me it`s more a room than a Box, but I still too have felt the emptiness and horror of feeling locked in, like Your mind, body and life is closed in and the walls seem to come closer and closer, choking the happiness out of you. I loved the last verse. It was really wonderful! Great job, keep writing. It`s good for you. And sorry for the big letters here and there, my computer has spassed out and refuses to turn off auto correct... :( Seriously, good job, keep writing!
    | Posted on 2013-08-26 00:00:00 | by ChrystalR | [ Reply to This ]

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