Description: For a long time, I was unable to express myself. I found I had hit a dry spell in wanting to write. Worse, I came to realize that though I feel the words in my poetry...I cannot express them orally. My voice carries no tones or emotion to convey what I am saying. That...is my box, amongst other things within it.
The Box -------------------------------------------
This box is all I know
There's a corner I go to
Soothing solitude awaits
That I cannot bear
There is a box
The tiny space of it
Suffocating in its emptiness
Muffled screams of silence
I live in a box
Stuck inside its madness
Trying to get out
Feeling locked in
The walls holding me inside
Hiding all my thoughts
Showing only my failures
Reflecting back to me isolation
This is the box
That contains broken dreams
That restrains my words
Choking time into days
This box holds nothing precious
Only serves as a prison
To my soul
For crimes I do not know
Time has not eroded this cage
Wrapped tight and dark
With the package label
Reading FRAGILE - MY LIFE
This was a really good piece. Technically it was fine, albeit not specially so, but the technical aspect doesn`t matter because what makes this piece awesome is the raw honesty and vulnerability in it! I am one of those who will always value honesty and emotion more than technical Precision. A poem without emotion is meaningless to me. You should feel a poem as much as you read it, and I truly felt this one. You`ve used the words well to captivate a negative state of mind, and the deep sometimes angsty emotions that come I think most of us have been there, but some of us feel it more than others. I Guess to me it`s more a room than a Box, but I still too have felt the emptiness and horror of feeling locked in, like Your mind, body and life is closed in and the walls seem to come closer and closer, choking the happiness out of you. I loved the last verse. It was really wonderful! Great job, keep writing. It`s good for you. And sorry for the big letters here and there, my computer has spassed out and refuses to turn off auto correct... :( Seriously, good job, keep writing!
Submission Name: The Box
