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In The Wind

Author: Rhythmal
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Class/Type: Misc /Misc
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In The Wind

Drifting away
Am I but a kiss in the wind
an unheard whisper perhaps
from one lover to another

Hidden thoughts and memories
of infidelities
Moonlit walks in the middle of winter
from one home to another

A new necklace, a new ring
not a penny from her pocket
or yours

Submitted on 2013-08-26 20:52:01     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  wow! I like that, very good imagines, really good. poe

if you dare read my other , I am a SOB.
| Posted on 2013-08-27 00:00:00 | by poetotoe | [ Reply to This ]

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