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    dots Submission Name: feeling the feeling of not feelingdots
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    Author: joezwells
    Elite Ratio:    3.81 - 64/78/54
    Words: 87
    Class/Type: Misc/Longing
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    dotsfeeling the feeling of not feelingdots
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    are you here yet?
    is that really you?
    feeling you I feel is not real
    feeling you I fear is not real
    the mind plays tricks
    how cruel those are
    feeling me not feeling you
    it is the worst feeling of all

    patiently waiting is harder then you know
    mine tend to run thin
    wanting you so
    here I will sit
    inpatient I am
    but the day we find you to be real
    all the feelings of fear
    will be forgotten without a tear




    Submitted on 2013-08-27 03:43:33     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I love the flow of this piece, as well as the concept.
    Or, at least what I've gathered--

    Like wanting to feel more than you do. Being disappointed with the lack of emotion that is expressed though the certain touch of another.

    A lack of chemistry, if you will.

    Just what I drew, because I've experienced that a few times.

    And for what it's worth, I really enjoyed this
    | Posted on 2013-08-27 00:00:00 | by OneDarkFlame92 | [ Reply to This ]
      Makes me wonder who the empirical it is. Serious states of fecundity cogent. Impatient I am!!!

    Bruce
    | Posted on 2013-08-27 00:00:00 | by monad | [ Reply to This ]


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