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    dots Submission Name: Preparednessdots
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    Author: lolaxelmo
    ASL Info:    23/F/IA
    Elite Ratio:    2.96 - 34/37/38
    Words: 91
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    dotsPreparednessdots
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    start now, write away of the aches and heart pains—
    when I catch the future let down
    it’ll even out from that frivolous beginning, bracing
    preparedness in the anticipation.
    i know the sudden surge
    smitten with new intensity
    i see it in nervous gestures,
    unsure of when to place a kiss—
    you lean in to the sound of a plastic spoon
    clink to the ground with sudden surprise
    we move past the stalled moment into
    a weightlessness to settle in before
    i register that it’s already over—
    a delayed reaction.




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      Beautiful work right there...and so true. Kinda sad but then again its how you feel that matters. Keep writing and try expanding your ideas! Youll make a great poet.
    Love,
    Teofila<3
    | Posted on 2013-09-14 00:00:00 | by Teofila | [ Reply to This ]
      You know as much as we like to think we really touch each other so often it followthrough seems like a delayed reaction, in harmony possibly, in sync apparently, sometimes we act as a single unit, but inevitably we wind up with ourselves and further more. I might like to think I have but in I don't actually own! Intriguing piece, good fun.

    Bruce
    | Posted on 2013-08-28 00:00:00 | by monad | [ Reply to This ]


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