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Submission Name: Preparedness dots

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Author:	lolaxelmo
ASL Info:	23/F/IA
Elite Ratio:	2.96 - 34/37/38
Words:	91

Class/Type:	Poetry/Love
Total Views:	657
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Bytes:	608

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Preparedness dots

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start now, write away of the aches and heart pains—
when I catch the future let down
it’ll even out from that frivolous beginning, bracing
preparedness in the anticipation.
i know the sudden surge
smitten with new intensity
i see it in nervous gestures,
unsure of when to place a kiss—
you lean in to the sound of a plastic spoon
clink to the ground with sudden surprise
we move past the stalled moment into
a weightlessness to settle in before
i register that it’s already over—
a delayed reaction.

Submitted on 2013-08-28 20:02:00 Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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Beautiful work right there...and so true. Kinda sad but then again its how you feel that matters. Keep writing and try expanding your ideas! Youll make a great poet.
Love,
Teofila<3
| Posted on 2013-09-14 00:00:00 | by Teofila | [ Reply to This ]
You know as much as we like to think we really touch each other so often it followthrough seems like a delayed reaction, in harmony possibly, in sync apparently, sometimes we act as a single unit, but inevitably we wind up with ourselves and further more. I might like to think I have but in I don't actually own! Intriguing piece, good fun.

Bruce
| Posted on 2013-08-28 00:00:00 | by monad | [ Reply to This ]

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Be kind, take a few minutes to review the hard work of others <3 It means a lot to them, as it does to you.

Be kind, take a few minutes to review the hard work of others <3
It means a lot to them, as it does to you.