I get a strong emotional feeling, but I am not sure I'm with you on meaning. I find reaction to a man who has killed the emotion with a woman. "Bugs on the eyes dead" I like. Makes me smile a literary smile although a smile in context of the piece doesn't seem appropriate. - Jim
I like the opening and phrasing of "bugs on the eyes".
Maybe I would have liked you to either elaborate a but more at the end or else leave things vague. I get the guilty dark feeling in the tone and It works well. Just think this poem could lose itself a little more. It's quite artistic with the layout and all, I'm enjoying your lines but the concluding lines do little for me. It's not something you should change. I just appreciated a certain part of this more than the whole.
The one night stand. The come and go. In and out and all that.
It clings like a needy child. I don't think you feel that way, I think that's more of how it feels to the 'Killer' in the piece.
I like the last three lines especially 'You pretend you don't know". I feel like there's a lot of truth to that statement. After a certain point, you can't ignore the facts sitting in front of you. And I know men who know exactly how to hunt. So it looks like the 'killer' is being painted as a predator and that damn well might be true, maybe not but regardless, you wrote what you felt and I think you wrote it well.