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    dots Submission Name: dots

    Author: thesunbird
    Elite Ratio:    8 - 198/19/19
    Words: 89
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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                             to live this way
    i should be divided
    hurtling like some body catapulted

         i should be dense
    like the sun' summit
              stuck on its course

    i should be refined.
    the aptitude: the grits & sands of which
    . amalgamated precision. but
    hear them roar

    i should

                                                                          the particle.


    and your beautiful hair
    lies lies lies upon me.

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