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    dots Submission Name: My Operation Endsdots
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    Author: Crestfallenman
    ASL Info:    24/M/CA
    Elite Ratio:    4.45 - 621/961/451
    Words: 98
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
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    Dark clouds and lullabies, pounding life's rite,
    Under my black skies, in my frantic pace,
    Grief strikes its claws deep beyond my might,
    Cowering my dignity, I hide my face...

    Days go by, and I'm only steering forward,
    Stumbling, crawling, swimming, falling apart,
    I feel everyone around me going onward,
    But here I am still dancing in the dark...

    What have I done to myself tonight?
    I've no reason to form my silent vow,
    Optimal disgust; everything is alright,
    I wish you felt what I feel now...

    But you never will...
    Because your not here...




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      wow. really deep. wonder what its honestly about...probably just too young to understand the meaning. oh well...keep writing and ill try and find yah!

    love,
    Teofila<3
    | Posted on 2013-09-13 00:00:00 | by Teofila | [ Reply to This ]


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