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    dots Submission Name: Do you remember?dots
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    Author: DaniEllis
    Elite Ratio:    2 - 6/7/8
    Words: 102
    Class/Type: Poetry/Alone
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    dotsDo you remember?dots
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    do you remember when you
    hugged me
    and said you'd always be my
    friend,
    right before i, well, you know,
    and then it was the end.
    ..........................................................

    how am i to ever trust,
    anything i ever hear,
    when everything betrayed me
    that i thought i held so dear?
    ..........................................................
    i scare myself aswell,
    sometimes i try to run away.
    ironic isn't it? it's you that's gone,
    but i wanted you to stay.
    ..........................................................

    i hated you for leaving me,
    for ever leaving my side...
    but then i guess what i hate the
    most,
    is that i still can't say goodbye.




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