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    dots Submission Name: Subconcious Truthsdots
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    Author: DaniEllis
    Elite Ratio:    2 - 6/7/8
    Words: 110
    Class/Type: Poetry/Betrayal
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    dotsSubconcious Truthsdots
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    I think I'll surrender
    You've beaten me now
    I feel so exhausted
    But I don't know how.
    Thoughts in my head
    Are screaming at me,
    I don't know if you can hear this,
    I wonder if you can see...
    Pain and guilt will overtake me;
    It's all your fault you know-Pleasure and freedom are all you
    have-Or at least thats all you show.
    You act like there's no problem
    But you see the sorrow in my eyes,
    The only thing that comforts me
    Is the truth behind your lies.
    You leave me here again
    Standing all alone.
    Confusion, chill, and darkness set
    in
    And I can't find my way home.




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