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    dots Submission Name: Forgivendots

    Author: Iram
    ASL Info:    25/F/from your world
    Elite Ratio:    2.66 - 50/62/55
    Words: 66
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 684
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    Other than being a forgiven offender
    You are a fragmented dark poem to me
    Who didn't deflower my virgin heart
    But intensified my moaning dreams
    And owned my depths like an intriguing wolf
    Who snapped my blossoms in squirting rains
    Leaving my state of orgasms upright
    Where fluids thrash in my horny veins
    Like an eternal longing of an urgent heat
    Never letting me complete.

    Submitted on 2013-09-08 02:55:04     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      It's a strange turn, very original since I haven't seen something like this in quite a while on here. I liked it, however, because it doesn't have to be taken in an entirely sexual manner. I feel like this means much more than that, and I'm sure you intended for a bigger meaning as well.
    I enjoyed it, nonetheless, and how well put together it is. Thanks for sharing, really.
    | Posted on 2013-09-08 00:00:00 | by MyPeriodical | [ Reply to This ]

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