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    dots Submission Name: A Needle in a Hay-ku Stackdots
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    Author: Erreur
    ASL Info:    20 / M / Canada
    Elite Ratio:    7.32 - 19/25/14
    Words: 72
    Class/Type: Haiku/Misc
    Total Views: 665
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 479



    Description:
       This was a piece I wanted to make for a very long time. However, I couldn't will the haikus to form. Perhaps I teased the liliputian muses :P I wish it could have been ten Haiku long, however, I didn't want to let it linger any longer. Anyways how many needles can you find?


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    dotsA Needle in a Hay-ku Stackdots
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    I need lil’ joys, so,
    The lilliputian muses
    Are who I now seek…

    As I balance food
    At the picnic, on my knee
    Dil pickles glimmer

    Never would I guess
    Enduring hazing makes a
    Elegant trainee

    Delete the pop-ups
    Letting go of penis pills
    Empty screens bring some peace

    I look through the loop
    At the end of the needle
    Where is Wonderland?




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      Not to be a PRICK (teethe), or anything, but it's lilLiputian. And of course you would find a word that sounds like lil putes.

    You need some good old bubble spinner, and maybe to watch that depressing movie about cystic fibrosis so you can appreciate the main character who turns down a flaming med student not because he has to (#aintnoshortersex #thanwithCF #imgoingtohell), but wants to.

    Or maybe you've just succumb to being a demisexual. Or maybe it's that you're a demi-pansexual. Also, if the blue pills aren't triangular, you could be dropping that thun thun thun.

    Most lethargically,

    une pute dans un trou.
    | Posted on 2013-09-10 00:00:00 | by Outlaw | [ Reply to This ]
      I found 4 needles, but I could be wrong (I'm rather slow). I've gotta say, though, this is definitely quite original and unique in its own special way. I loved how playful this piece turned out and how cool the feeling is to it.
    I'm naturally a big fan of haiku, I've even tried to bring up some pieces of my own some times; that being said, I don't think I'm very good.
    Either way, I'm glad I stumbled upon this work of art, because even if it's not the style that I'm used to, I liked the change.
    Good job, good job.
    | Posted on 2013-09-08 00:00:00 | by MyPeriodical | [ Reply to This ]


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