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    dots Submission Name: An Approachdots

    Author: Erreur
    ASL Info:    20 / M / Canada
    Elite Ratio:    7.32 - 19/25/14
    Words: 107
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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       I can't decide if it is done... You should tell me if it is...

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    dotsAn Approachdots

    People chat, and dance
    They carry on happy
    Late into the cool evening

    You can’t enjoy it
    Instead you feel trapped in there
    Some elusive ache holds you

    However, you hide
    The feelings of sadness
    As old friends approach

    You’re told a secret
    Thus far your tongue stays still
    It wouldn’t know what to do

    For you can’t command it
    You don’t know what you feel
    Your passion emaciates

    The things you once knew
    Have faded and twisted
    Under the thoughts of others

    You’re mind has hallowed
    Unable to create
    You’re an echolalia

    Submitted on 2013-09-09 23:27:58     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      You should really listen to the song "echolalia" by dead can dance. You might find yourself in the echoing madness. On a side note, I used to say only animals are mad, and therefore it is only them who can be victims of madness - because humans are crazy. But now that I live in rapacity (swallow that second a and replace it with an E, if you feel me), I can't help but think the distinction between MAN and beast was but a foolish folly.

    In other news, unless you're under the influence of some drogue dure, you're definitely the one holding yourself back. You can blame your friends all you want, or the gravity of nothingness (which, I know, I know, it's hard to believe, but actually does have a gravitational pull). But ultimately you are the one who chooses your limits.

    Just like you decide when you are done with being sick. Also, add more cliché lines like "falling to pieces" please.
    | Posted on 2013-09-10 00:00:00 | by Outlaw | [ Reply to This ]

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