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    dots Submission Name: My Heartdots
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    Author: Teofila
    ASL Info:    17, F, with the wolves
    Elite Ratio:    0.48 - 210/102/70
    Words: 95
    Class/Type: Poetry/Dark
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    Description:
       I was at home one day and found that my parents were getting divorced and my boyfriend was breaking up with me and I didn't know who I could trust anymore...this is a poem I wrote to kinda describe how I felt...hope you all like it.


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    dotsMy Heartdots
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    This pain inside my heart
    oh so fresh and new
    I knew that it could be
    only caused by you.
    This hole straight through my heart
    caused by things you say
    I love you, Its over
    Its just another day.
    The coldness of my heart
    was only caused by you
    even though my love
    was always strong and true.
    The scars across my heart
    deep as they can be
    self-inflicted wounds
    only caused by me.
    The warmth of my heart
    only few will ever see
    those few who really care
    they accept me for me...




    Submitted on 2013-09-13 15:27:05     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I like it. I especially like the end, when through all this new painful experience, you get to the meat of it, that those who are really worth it are the ones who dont judge harshly and hold these things, whatever they are, against you. Dr. suess once said, be who you are because those who care dont matter, and those that matter dont care.

    Anyways, it's always worse the first time around. I'm no ghandi, but just keep moving and you'll be fine.
    | Posted on 2013-10-28 00:00:00 | by Zai | [ Reply to This ]


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