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    dots Submission Name: I'll Come For Youdots
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    Author: Teofila
    ASL Info:    17, F, with the wolves
    Elite Ratio:    0.48 - 210/102/70
    Words: 47
    Class/Type: Poetry/Betrayal
    Total Views: 886
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       I wrote this for a friend one night when she was having guy problems...lets just say she did the right thing. ;)


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    dotsI'll Come For Youdots
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    You say you love me,
    I know you don't.
    You call my phone,
    I'm not home.
    You say you're sorry,
    I don't care.
    You broke my heart,
    and left it there.
    You broke my heart,
    right in two.
    but don't worry baby,
    I'll come back for you...




    Submitted on 2013-09-13 16:00:53     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Haha geez. Youre gonna make me write the same comments over again. Short but sweet. Yet very complex. I dont wanna over analyze. But great job
    | Posted on 2013-09-29 00:00:00 | by kase | [ Reply to This ]


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