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    dots Submission Name: That Which is in Perpetuumdots
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    Author: BusterLILblock
    ASL Info:    21/F
    Elite Ratio:    3.51 - 452/270/50
    Words: 102
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    dotsThat Which is in Perpetuumdots
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    Before,
    She waited.
    She waited for you.
    Soundless vexation.

    The breeze
    Blew with arctic stillness.

    The static
    Hummed with jagged quiescence.

    After,
    Her nights seemed never ending.
    Amaranthine was the closing of day.
    A particular void seeped within.

    And her thousand moments of life seem to fall untouched.
    Crowded walls seem unlived.
    Her desolate core seemed to fire.

    Insurmountable
    Waiting.

    Boundless
    Waiting.

    While sporadic placements of the souls were aligned.

    Forty-eight eves,
    To wait

    She implored:

    "I pray my soul be placed
    Perpetually
    Alongside yours."

    Metaphysical
    Perpetuum




    Submitted on 2013-09-14 18:22:47     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      this is soo cute.
    | Posted on 2013-11-09 00:00:00 | by geekyslacker | [ Reply to This ]


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