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    dots Submission Name: Sunsetdots
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    Author: Teofila
    ASL Info:    17, F, with the wolves
    Elite Ratio:    0.48 - 210/102/70
    Words: 47
    Class/Type: Poetry/Nature
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    dotsSunsetdots
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    The sun is bright
    As I close my eyes
    And let it wash over me
    The chills are unavoidable
    As you dip to meet the ground
    My lover is here with me
    I know everything is alright
    And I shall sleep safely
    Again
    Just one more night...




    Submitted on 2013-09-16 16:56:42     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I really liked this, i like the use of tthe word wash to discribe the rays of the sun paints a good picture good job
    | Posted on 2013-09-21 00:00:00 | by Diablo Tapitio | [ Reply to This ]


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