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    dots Submission Name: Heartbeatdots
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    Author: Teofila
    ASL Info:    17, F, with the wolves
    Elite Ratio:    0.48 - 210/102/70
    Words: 72
    Class/Type: Poetry/Dark
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    dotsHeartbeatdots
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    The thump of your heart
    As it lulls me to sleep
    In synch to mine
    With its own steady beat
    So as I finally close my eyes
    To rest this very last night
    I am assured that
    Everything's gonna be alright
    As I fade into the darkness
    Of my own dreams
    I awake as a tear
    Silently rolls down my cheek
    Only to realize
    That was your beautiful hearts
    Very last beat...




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