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    dots Submission Name: Homedots
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    Author: Teofila
    ASL Info:    17, F, with the wolves
    Elite Ratio:    0.48 - 210/102/70
    Words: 40
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    dotsHomedots
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    The excitement
    Coursing through me
    As you
    Gently kiss my lips
    Begins my own
    Perfect little bliss
    Your lips are
    Smooth like velvet
    As they
    Cross over my own
    And they
    Sweetly reassure me
    That this is now
    My home...




    Submitted on 2013-09-17 17:09:07     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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