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    dots Submission Name: My Addictiondots
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    Author: Teofila
    ASL Info:    17, F, with the wolves
    Elite Ratio:    0.48 - 210/102/70
    Words: 58
    Class/Type: Poetry/Passion
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    dotsMy Addictiondots
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    Your Touch,
    travels slowly
    sending shivers down my spine
    as I wonder to myself
    why can't this be mine?
    Your Breath,
    hot on my skin
    just give me a moment
    to let this sink in...
    Your Kiss,
    so dangerous
    lingers still on my lips
    but ever so slowly
    you kiss me again...
    and you're quickly becoming
    My Addiction...




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      Wow this was soo simple but it was great. Very very great imagery. This is def something you should continue one day. Someone once told me that you should never write sequels to poems but i had mediocre success with mty this is what happens next trilogy. I think this could be the start of a great itrilogy. First this poem the addiction building. Love beggining to flourish. Next loves climax. The transformation from addiction to the climax of a high. Then finally the burnout. Loves ending. Love falling appart. Anyways. This was great
    | Posted on 2013-09-29 00:00:00 | by kase | [ Reply to This ]
      the passion in this piece is beautiful. it is as we have spoken of before; the emotion really drives the piece and draws the reader in. well done.
    | Posted on 2013-09-25 00:00:00 | by gwenn sundala | [ Reply to This ]


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