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    dots Submission Name: Play Whoredots
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    Author: Iram
    ASL Info:    25/F/from your world
    Elite Ratio:    2.66 - 50/62/55
    Words: 74
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsPlay Whoredots
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    Thy time is up playing a sane affection
    Let my decisive whimper wade on
    While thy lips sip the night's molten drops
    Thy temptations rust in my weary palms
    Alive and tossing under the skulls of hopes
    I drink thy lust that pretends me humane
    Slammed in thy bed to obey thy ropes
    And suck thy fingers that write my domain
    Whore me tonight to replay thy elopes
    For I shall not come again.




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      Why time is up playing a sane affection
    Let my indecisive whimper wade upon you
    While lips sip this night's molten burning kiss
    Temptations rust any in my weary palms, nightly
    Alive to toss under the skull of hope and despair
    I drink this lust that pretends to be me, humane
    Slammed to a bed too obey the ropes, be tied
    Sucking the fingers that write my domain
    Whore me tonight to replay and elopes
    For I shall not come again too taunt.
    | Posted on 2013-09-23 00:00:00 | by poetotoe | [ Reply to This ]


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