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    dots Submission Name: Happy birthday message to an old frienddots
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    Author: expiring_touch
    ASL Info:    26/f/Hamburg
    Elite Ratio:    4.04 - 136/243/154
    Words: 130
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsHappy birthday message to an old frienddots
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    Dearheart, (what an old fashioned word! but I like how it
    rolls - on my tongue, and what's even
    more important - it suits you.) You
    with an ice cream cone in hand on one
    of the coldest days, grey and weeping
    edge of a grand German river, or even
    childishly
    refusing to go and admire Beatles muse
    work of art, the strands of light
    falling
    on their own tombstones.
    You? Yes you, from our first meeting in
    the blaring white Budapest now disappearing
    with a 5 year memory stamp on it - read, seen,
    felt - and even more -
    last time I saw Paris, with that sting
    of hot chocolate on my mouth -
    all these scraps only add to how much
    I cherish you. Happy
    birthday!




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    ||| Comments |||
      i like that you write to your lover like a german. are you one?

    you order your release uber methodically and all-in-all i did enjoy what you had to say: artfully composed and sufficient narrative with which to make the poem reflect your inner.

    most don't get it: i do because your code is accessible. and that is rare in our collective. let me know if J drops you a line. she really is on the money...
    | Posted on 2013-09-23 00:00:00 | by Awkward | [ Reply to This ]
      i like that you write to your lover like a german. are you one?

    you order your release uber methodically and all-in-all i did enjoy what you had to say: artfully composed and sufficient narrative with which to make the poem reflect your inner.

    most don't get it: i do because your code is accessible. and that is rare in our collective. let me know if J drops you a line. she really is on the money...
    | Posted on 2013-09-23 00:00:00 | by Awkward | [ Reply to This ]
      So mellowing sincere and graphical coloured in the past tense of yesteryear. Nice work. Regards Joachim.
    | Posted on 2013-09-22 00:00:00 | by Joachim | [ Reply to This ]


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