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    dots Submission Name: My Life III.dots
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    Author: Crestfallenman
    ASL Info:    24/M/CA
    Elite Ratio:    4.45 - 621/961/451
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    Class/Type: Poetry/Passion
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    So threaten me, with your irrationality,
    Smite me, when I don't perfect living demands.
    But inside your spirit, I'm the entity,
    You can't deny me, you can't pretend,
    No matter the case,
    I'm here until the very end.

    So please remember the moments won,
    Those experience's gifted to very few.
    Don't throw the towel when life's just begun,
    No matter what pains inside you,
    You''ll find your way,
    This pain can unravel these sacred virtues.

    For the tempter, the serpent of self-hate,
    The embers of forever burning fires.
    Confer to this life we create,
    And let this hate finally retire,
    So we can live,
    With our mortal desires.

    To love, to continue,
    To live...Before living is no more...
    Patience, this trial is not at end.




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      Ah yes, perspicacious perseverance personifications. Hopefully they will be felicitous fidelity. I really like the line "Confer to this life we create". I like to think we can imbue with our exude to emote. I like to think there's a positive force innate to the universe. I like to think I, demagoguery armed enigma entity, resemble God. This is not complete irrationality. Evolution is a natural force, of it's the nature of being, we all hope for a better state of euthenics if not for euphenic or even eugenic advancement. I think mortal desires could lead us to probity. There's lots of opposition to this but I could like to induce, even if I had to inure. Although I see some of these things in myself perhaps "the serpent of self hate" could have a positive effect. Reminding me to remain felicitous with my fidelity, not be a decadent debauchery. I have high hopes for the fort sort court report aimed bailiff rakeness rails, like tortness port quarts, consort contort retort cohort cavort snort. Psychic (sigh chic) reggae regalia I that. No, this trial is not near over!!

    Bruce
    | Posted on 2013-09-21 00:00:00 | by monad | [ Reply to This ]


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