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    dots Submission Name: Beach Babydots
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    Author: KimmyMim
    Elite Ratio:    4.4 - 223/303/117
    Words: 158
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsBeach Babydots
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    That baby on the left...
    well he hit hard and never fully recovered.
    The beach unmercifully swallowed his head
    leaving his arms, torso and legs akimbo,
    thrashing for attention
    and relief.

    His school years
    were endless jeers
    from relentless peers.
    They nicknamed him "Shelly,"
    "Barnacle Bill" ...even "Crabby"
    just to see his anger froth.

    The poor boy.

    His hair, carrot in color,
    was textured as seaweed.
    Skin, coarse as rocks,
    blemished and unrefined
    leaving himself an unavoidable beacon
    for derision.

    He was, in fact, one night shy of Lunacy.

    As an adult he would anchor himself on shore
    while his eyes would navigate the horizon
    like a readied battleship set course
    to locate and unearth any who were buried
    beneath the surface...
    that he might soothe them,
    calm their insatiable rage,
    help them to sleep.

    Pail and shovel in hand,
    he became known to some of us as...
    The Sand Man.




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