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    dots Submission Name: My Life IV.dots
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    Author: Crestfallenman
    ASL Info:    24/M/CA
    Elite Ratio:    4.45 - 621/961/451
    Words: 152
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    dotsMy Life IV.dots
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    This is the fight no one ever knew,
    Quite, frail, disquieted with fear of mortal sin.
    I've crawled in the shadows no one ever knew,
    And drowned from the silence killing within,
    This is my matter,
    Reminded forever of the scars 'pon my skin.

    Bottled deeply, I had no place to hide,
    No where to go but only forward in this life,
    To relinquish my feelings of suicide,
    Serrated feelings leaving me lonesome at night,
    I confide,
    In a love so false, it distorts my sight.

    Where will I go now? How will I endure?
    Will I continue to march this triumph of pain?
    Or will I let this blackness burn my rapture,
    Forever drowning in this rain...
    My life I know,
    Will never be the same...

    Rest assured, I am fighting to reside,
    To defeat this accusation of suicide...

    But time is drifting,
    My trial continues...




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