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    dots Submission Name: Today I danceddots
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    Author: KeeperOfLight
    ASL Info:    23, Vancouver BC
    Elite Ratio:    2.54 - 41/64/78
    Words: 122
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
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    dotsToday I danceddots
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    I danced with their sorrow and their longing.
    Their hesitations and procrastinations.
    Their visions and desires.
    Their foundation of self image.
    Their uncognitive being.

    I pulled their strings to make them think they are wanted.

    But they are not who I desire.

    Their image replaced by the reality I wanted to ESCAPE!

    Its an orthodox world full of mispronunciations while tender eyes and tender feelings become castrated with deceit.

    Even mine at times

    Luckily I fall back to my foundation and open my eyes to my reality and the realm of my own cognitive consciousness.

    It makes me wonder why we are lead to a world of fornicated decay of our finely spun souls?




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