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    dots Submission Name: Why Are You "Dying"dots
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    Author: KeeperOfLight
    ASL Info:    23, Vancouver BC
    Elite Ratio:    2.55 - 41/64/76
    Words: 254
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
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    What’s sad to me is that I wouldn’t think its my fault that you are gone.

    What’s sad to me is that I couldn’t inspire you to change an ideal, a “negative” one that’s controlling your life.

    What’s sad to me is that the rest of the world holds these “negative” ideals and they do nothing.

    They wilt away slowly.

    What’s sad to me is to see their power to “be” fade.

    What’s sad to me is that I can’t inspire the people close to me; so how will I do it for the rest of the world?

    What’s sad to me is to realize…we are all sad and powerless inside…and its hard.

    What’s sad to me is to think of all the power I could have to inspire other people if we could all just create and let them see our path.

    ~*~


    What I can do is be more positive, and make you, and me, and our world, my problem.

    What I can do is to realize we can all change, and we can all INSPIRE.

    Every moment experienced…is an inspiration to create “you” to create “me” and to create “our world”.

    What I can do is to grasp those thoughts and bring them closer to the surface for you to see. This is doing something.

    I won’t watch you wilt away.

    I will inspire “you”…and the rest of the world.

    "Our world" and "me".




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      That's almost the escape clause on my depression over the state of the human race exactly. How I wish I could fashion an argument with which to mitigate the discrepancies in the human condition. The answers seem so obvious and yet the attitude problem this exudes is not worn by all. There is little to be said for the humanoid metaphysical mystique and yet preaching this form of psycho-kinetics seems almost irreverent given our lack of telekinesis abilities. Further, though I could like to be teleportationally tele-communicational what am I communicating. Our minds are bioelectric, so much synaptic syntax; of we animal don't meld here very well. What is the credibility of what I'm communicating to all so boldly? Is it really what they need of the moment? There is a vast difference between relative rationality and rational relativity.

    Perhaps I'm being maieutic, playing to their subconscious, but I need my subconscious to display a functional organization principle, I am unique.

    So what is to exude as we emote, what do we hope to imbue? Personally I believe we are going to have to promulgate and inure for there is just too much dissent.

    A little bit of mercenary mendacity on that enigma entity for you!!

    Bruce

    PS: Life is love, most people are dead, join the living. It can be so depressing being human, trying to inpregnate the rainbow mare with your aura rone, hoping for coltness bolt jolties and frisky fillies.
    | Posted on 2013-09-28 00:00:00 | by monad | [ Reply to This ]


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