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    dots Submission Name: Once Upon A Dreamdots
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    Author: raspberry89
    Elite Ratio:    1.6 - 5/18/22
    Words: 123
    Class/Type: Poetry/Alone
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    dotsOnce Upon A Dreamdots
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    I met a man one cold winter day

    He spoke to me in an unfamiliar way

    He was so humble -- I grew hopeful

    I was just waiting on this man to make it vocal

    He did but what I heard didn't convey

    Any similarity to what I thought he would say

    Yet I continued to hope as he faded away

    Reality on my dreams then did prey

    And now I can’t get him out of my mind

    I’m anxious and worried all of the time

    I can’t loosen this grip on my heart

    Whatever remains will soon fall apart




    Submitted on 2013-09-29 06:46:23     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      brilliant rhyme and rhythm im sorry you had to go through that though
    | Posted on 2013-09-29 00:00:00 | by Teofila | [ Reply to This ]


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