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    dots Submission Name: Goodbyedots
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    Author: Teofila
    ASL Info:    17, F, with the wolves
    Elite Ratio:    0.48 - 210/102/70
    Words: 91
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
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    dotsGoodbyedots
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    The pain I feel inside
    So very familiar
    Known all to well
    The shattering of a heart
    Another empty home
    Memories from the wall
    All completely gone
    She wont come back
    Not this time
    She screwed up
    So here's this rhyme
    I will say
    Goodbye
    Goodbye
    You left me broken
    To broken to heal
    Scared for life
    Wondering...
    What is real?
    This is for you
    Who cut me so deep
    Down to the core
    Now watch the blood seep
    Down my arms
    To the floor...
    I cant take
    This life anymore...




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      I disagree. Take that pain and let it fuel you. Too many people get hurt and cower in fear because of it. They let that fear consume them to nothing. Don't let this happen. Seize the day and don't take crap from anyone. Be strong and you'll find not only a heart that has been healed but one that is stronger still.
    | Posted on 2013-10-06 00:00:00 | by ares_nuke_1 | [ Reply to This ]
      I know perhaps I'm to old to offer much insight but suicide is almost never the answer. Your broken heart is still animal pumping, thump thump thumping. Let it be your personal refuge and strive to find yourself within. Search for your self worth and find the viable individual that survives. Breathe deep and enjoy the sunshine, revel in nature, that always helps me.

    Bruce
    | Posted on 2013-09-29 00:00:00 | by monad | [ Reply to This ]


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