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    dots Submission Name: What Others Havedots
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    Author: EileenToTheLeft
    ASL Info:    28/f/va
    Elite Ratio:    2.58 - 16/36/55
    Words: 66
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsWhat Others Havedots
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    I try to enjoy what others have.
    Pour that milk into this mold and let it sour;
    form these legs that I shave for them.
    I run my finger up and feel the smoothness.
    I try to enjoy what others have.
    But, these nerve receptors - desolate.
    Out Of Service cerebral cortex.
    It left me on a bed and I
    try to enjoy what others have.




    Submitted on 2013-09-29 22:58:31     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Your poem is feels intense, although I am not sure what it is others have. I am sure that mystery is how you wanted it. I am just terrible with subtlety. I enjoyed it though.
    | Posted on 2013-10-14 00:00:00 | by nolram | [ Reply to This ]
      Vicarious can be inviting, it seems like it could hold true in to me. A prolifically profuse recalcitrant harmony we could all live with, it could even be the state of fidelity it appears it could be!!!..............Not likely, we are all enigmas that bear the burden of original sin (an identity). When being vicarious we must live within the boundaries of our problematic diversity, of this is the true nature of vicarious recalcitrance. We draw from self to give, yes, no?

    Bruce
    | Posted on 2013-09-30 00:00:00 | by monad | [ Reply to This ]


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