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    dots Submission Name: Random Loss of love poem no real title yetdots
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    Author: DeathTone
    ASL Info:    32 / Male / United States
    Elite Ratio:    5.55 - 81/55/29
    Words: 81
    Class/Type: Misc/Love
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       nothing special just starting to put some stuff up again that has been on my mind


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    dotsRandom Loss of love poem no real title yetdots
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    It's a freakish game leaving you drained full of pain. Like a tornado we go around and around, so much anger we drown. Try and try we do our best but this never seems to rest. We both hurt so deep that we dream about it in our sleep. But we love each other and so we hang on, but for how long? I do know that I don't want to let you go, I just wish you believed me though!




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