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    dots Submission Name: The Seed I Sowdots
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    Author: DeathTone
    ASL Info:    32 / Male / United States
    Elite Ratio:    5.54 - 81/55/30
    Words: 105
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsThe Seed I Sowdots
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    My sorrow will dwindle tomorrow
    My heart falling apart
    The seed I sow shall never know
    Look upward in shame for I am to blame
    Crumble at your feet for I feel defeat
    Hold my head high and keep up the lie
    Shine like a star seen from afar
    Be a man for its all I am
    Hide the tears I shed bandage what I bled
    Why is life so cruel like a painful rule
    Cry if I must and wipe off the dust
    Can you feel my pain flowing through my brain
    What else must I do to prove that I love you




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