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    dots Submission Name: When can i go home?dots
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    Author: ForgottenGraves
    ASL Info:    20, Male
    Elite Ratio:    0.42 - 5/111/127
    Words: 127
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
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    dotsWhen can i go home?dots
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    All my life i've lived in houses.
    Large unbreakable establishments.
    I thought that those we're my home.
    I couldn't have be more wrong..
    My home is where i can wrap my arms around you.
    My home is where we can share a kiss.
    My home is where i look into your eyes and smile.
    I haven't been home in so very long...
    Who knows if i will ever return...
    But for now I have to ask,
    When can i go home?
    That my love...
    Is for you to decide.
    Give me the word and i will come in an instant.
    No questions
    No if's, ands, or buts about it.
    I will rush to you as fast as i can.
    So my dear,
    When can i go home?




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